What do you think of my Poem?

Fall Foliage





Fall is in the Air


Air that is abundant with Childhood memories


Memories that bring back thoughts of Apple bobbing


Apples that fell from my Grandfathers Ochard trees


Tree's where me and my Brother climbed


Climbed up a rock hill were I fell while my brother laughed


Laughter that stopped when he passed


Passed to a better place a place where Heaven is always Fall


Fall where my Grandmother would trip over the old linoleum floor in her kitchen


Kitchen where she would make my favorite Blackberry cobbler each Thanksgiving Dinner


Dinner where all my family were Happy and Cheerful


Cheerful despite the the pain and suffering we experienced being poor


Poor wearing Bread sacks over my shoes to protect my feet from the Snow


Snow that made my life hard while I feed the Cattle while it brightened my spirit by it's beauty


Beauty my Mother baking Aapple pies while weeping that my father's love was gone


Gone but not lost is my memories of Fall and Love


Love of my family and loved ones that have passed


Passed is summer and Fall brings back wonderful memories of Love


Love that I give to all that I encounter


Encountering a fall filled with love

What do you think of my Poem?
I like the pattern here, especially the part about grandma tripping over the linoleum floor. And the sad part about your brother.





This is good. my elderly mother would love to read this.
Reply:Thats a really nice poem ........really goood one
Reply:i thogutht that was relly cool the way u set it up. ending with a certain word and then starting with that same word. thats pretty neat. And it was very nicely written



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