What do you think of My Modified Poem?

Fall Foliage





Fall is in the Air


Air that is abundant with Childhood memories


Memories that bring back thoughts of Apple bobbing


Apples that fell from my Grandfathers Ochard trees


Tree's where me and my Brother climbed


Climbed up a rock hill were I fell while my brother laughed


Laughter that stopped when he passed


Passed to a better place a place where Heaven is always Fall


Fall where my Grandmother would trip over the old linoleum floor in her kitchen


Kitchen where she would make my favorite Blackberry cobbler each Thanksgiving Dinner


Dinner where all my family were Happy and Cheerful


Cheerful despite the the pain and suffering we experienced being poor


Poor wearing Bread sacks over my shoes to protect my feet from the Snow


Snow that made my life hard while I feed the Cattle while it brightened my spirit by it's beauty


Beauty my Mother baking Aapple pies while weeping that my father's love was gone


Gone but not lost is my memories of Fall and Love


Love of my family and loved ones that have passed


Passed is summer and Fall brings back wonderful memories of Love


Love that I give to all that I encounter


Encountering a fall filled with love

What do you think of My Modified Poem?
I like it a lot. You did a great job. Makes me yearn for my family.
Reply:Very Beautiful... I love this time of year, and your poem brought back memories of good ol' times. Please submit this...
Reply:beloved Tracer, you should send the recollection of your poems to Reader's Digest and maybe get published. Sorry about your tragic events and I am glad you overcoming them. Hopefully you'll find the LOVE you so fervently desire and need. Best of luck and you can count on my unconditional love, my beautiful calf.



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